Terrified, petrified, scared. I can't find the proper word to describe how I am felling right now.
How am I supposed to convince the staff at el rancho camp to let the contestents of Masterchef cook the food at camp? I think personally that would be the perfect match. Can you just see on the sign "El Rancho camp food cooked by Masterchef contestants." I think, actually I know, it it will be an excellent outcome.
The reason why I am trying to convince the staff at El Rancho camp to let the contestents of Masterchef cook the food, is because some of the food was putrid ugh disgusting. For example, the chicken and the sausages compared to the food on Masterchef! Yum! It makes me hungry just thinking about it. Yuuummm, okay snap out of it, back to the story. I think they would make great food like pancakes, cakes and ice cream. OMG too much to remember.
Feedback I think that you wrote a great story
Feedforward Next time you could let me read it before I do your feedback and feedforward.
Evaluation I think I did a great storie but I think I could of made it a bit bigger and I could of added a bit more detail